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6月12日作文题13

本主题由 qifeihu 于 2008-7-9 18:25 提升
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回复 4# 的帖子

文章整体的结构很清晰,但最后是不是最好总结一下,有点虎头蛇尾的感觉,还是没时间了?呵呵。

有一个小问题,就是没有例子,虽然说forgiven同学在没有例子的情况下就写了350多字,但加上例子就更有说服力了,是不?呵呵。

语言上还是很好的,不像我,就知道用些简单词句,哎,不过拼写错误还是有点多的,可以先放到WORD里去校一下,在贴上来

加油!加油!共同加油!

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在写作中,A orB,agree or disagree 这些题可以选择中立的角度吗?

  可以选择“看情况而定“这种观点吗?
  这看起来好像中国中庸的观点,老外接受不?

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回复 5# 的帖子

contract with——是不是contact with好一点呢?
请教,which differ from change apple, one person one apple still.这是什么意思啊?

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回复 8# 的帖子

choice是否改为choose呢?
also will——will also?
kindredcompanies 这个是什么意思啊?
结构看着我有点晕,是精心安排的吗?
我刚开始写作文,还请多多指教

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topic 1

A common phenomenon is quite a lot of girls and boys like to choose friends who are similar to themselves, because they can share the same ideas on what they love. Considerable though the advantages that sharing the same ideas on what the favorable things, they are not competed with the benefits that attaining some opposite advices, when the point which is more useful is taken into consideration. Hence, I strongly agree with friends who are different from me.

A friend who holds different viewpoints could give me much more instructive insight to see the world. For example, as my major is law, the most exciting thing for me is to communicate different arguments about the case with my friends. Many times, of course, I just see only one perspective of things, and after some discussions with varies of opinions, I can reflect them extensively and deeply. No one can deny it is a good way to improve myself. The more we discuss, the more I gain knowledge and thinking.

Another contributing reason that I'd like to choose different characteristics friends is that he/she maybe can give me a better advice when I face with difficulties. Same characteristic persons will, constantly, confront the same problems. If we meet the same problem and we have the same characteristics, what I should ask from them? Maybe the worse they may handle. Opposed to these occasions are those which will change the matter and become better. I remember one of my best friend help me a lot last time that I cannot decide whether I should go abroad right now, because there were a good job waited for me. I always hesitated and I did not know which to choose. He talked to me for a long time and at last, he said sincerely, what you need to do is deciding. If you still hesitate, you will miss neither of them. After all, I decided to go abroad and I overcame the problem of hesitation with the help of him.

Undoubtly, there are also some disadvantages between friends who do not hold the same ideas. Some people will argue aggressively and even fight for the discussion or break up the friendship. As I perceive the issue, it is not the point of fighting. What the point is if the discussion deserves quite an argument. When we faced with a real hard nut, it deserves us to fight for the truth. Certainly, I believe our friendship will go on more fixedly later.

In sum, when choosing a friend, a different person seems more charming to me because both of us will improve greatly for this friendship. I hope one day I can meet a real friend like Plato, who is love truth than his teacher. Then maybe I will happy for ever to meet this friend.

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回复 2# 的帖子

the friends that bolster改成friend that bolsters好不好呢?

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回复 3# 的帖子

children and competiveness 改成ompetitiveness 好不好呢of country. Only by doing this strategy, children and country would have the bright future.
one day, the newly neighbor moving to your community speaks the different language, or you dream lover will use another language to say “I love you". How to adapt to such trend of modern society transition? 邻居和伴侣说不同的语言是一种trend
和说不同语言的有效方法One effective method is to encourage the children to begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school.应该没有明显的逻辑关系吧
this benefit would open for the children the door to other cultures and help a child understand and appreciate people from other countries,是不是变this benefit would open the door  for the children to the picturesque cultural apex in other countries,好些,作些细节,不空吧

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原帖由 lovemeyouha 于 2008-6-16 23:24 发表
children and competiveness 改成ompetitiveness 好不好呢of country. Only by doing this strategy, children and country would have the bright future.
one day, the newly neighbor moving to your community  ...
很有道理,我的结尾really suck

探讨一下 这篇文章应该是重点放在children的 " as soon as they start school" 这一点上吧,如果是这样的话,我的应该是跑题了 我再想想看 找找理由 重新做一下

[ 本帖最后由 нандин 于 2008-6-17 11:22 编辑 ]

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[quote]原帖由 qhy0225 于 2008-6-16 23:00 发表
choice是否改为choose呢?
also will——will also?
kindredcompanies 这个是什么意思啊?
结构看着我有点晕,是精心安排的吗?
我刚开始写作文,还请多多指教 [/quote

我也是刚写呢]今天看了一本好书,是叫满分作文。
书写的倒不错,教你怎么写好作文,kindred    companies  应该是这个,我想表达相同类型(有共同爱好)的朋友

我发现了一个方法,每个人总觉得自己的文章写完以后都会很好很满意,
但是过几天再来看自己的作文,把它当成别人的来看,

就会发现很多问题了。呵呵

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