同一个题目，写了两次，除了开头比较相同以外，2篇思路基本上是不同的。
A university education should include an internship or some type of work experience.同意与否？

麻烦帮我看一下吧，考试的时候写怎样的比较好呢？
再就是目前这个水平，提高可能最显著的是哪些方面？

谢谢所有飘过的人，更谢谢愿意指导的大家~~`

No.1
I cannot agree more with the statement that the college education should contain internship or other working experiences since it will not only provides students a valuable opportunity to practice what they've learned but also increases their competence in the job market.  Without such experiences, companies may judge the newly graduates as naive and the candidates may also feel lack of self-assurance as well.

To begin with, I strongly support the proposal of adding internship in the college education because the internship could help students to enhance knowledge from the classes. For instance, as a student who majored in journalism, well though I have conquered how to write a news report, without self experiences, I was stunned when I covered a live event for the first time in front of the camera. What's more, my friends who graduated from other departments such as finance, computer science and antropology, etc, once also faced the similar situations in which we can barely remember anything from the textbooks. Indeed, only by putting things into practice could we acquire the knowledge authentically.

In addition, this kind of working experiences will also be a valuable part in one’s whole life because it is the very first chance for most students to step into the society and taste the bitter or sweet life as an employee, which could help them adjust their attitude before formally enter the cruel world. It is reported frequently that newly graduates suicide due to the high pressure, while the companies are complaining that the newly employees are becoming more fragile. In my perspective, the additional internship will help students having better understanding of the real business world and provide them a certain period to finish the role exchanging from pure students to employees.

What’s more, by changing the curriculum the university can also win reputation for itself. As far as we all know, the innovation could absolutely change into productivity. The university which set the internship as a mandatory course will increase the teaching efficiency and eventually have effect on the graduates’ performances in the companies. Beyond any doubt, the feedback come from companies will have great impact on the enrollment of the universities in the future.

Just as I’ve mentioned above, thanks to the advantages which could be brought by internship or work experiences to the students both academically and psychologically and to the school’s reputation as well, they should be a part of university study.

No.2(前两段基本上是一样的，可以忽略的说)
I cannot agree more with the statement that the college education should contain internship or other working experiences since it will not only provides students a valuable opportunity to practice what they've learned but also increases their competence in the job market.  Without such experiences, companies may judge the newly graduates as naive and the candidates may also feel lack of self-consciousness as well.  

To begin with, I strongly support the proposal of adding internship in the college education because the internship could help students to enhance knowledge from the classes. For instance, as a student who majored in journalism, well though I have conquered how to write a news report, without self experiences, I was stunned when I was asked to cover a live event all by myself for the first time in the local TV station. What's more, my friends who graduated from other departments such as finance, computer science and antropology, etc, once also faced the similar situations in which we can barely remember anything from the textbooks. Indeed, only by doing it could we acquire the knowledge and put it into practice.

In addition, working experiences are not only important for the students or employees but also to the employers. Admittedly, there’s no company would prefer to train the graduates without any experiences rather than hire experienced ones. It is a quite common phenomenon that in the company's advertisements, they always ask for those who have related working experiences. Because of this trend, graduates are eager to find internship during their summer and winter vacation which is also another heavy burden for the students and their parents since some of them even have to buy an internship vacancy which is also limited. These facts are calling for the universities to add the internship or  working experiences as part of the college education which will not only benefit the students who want to hunt a job but also to the school's reputation.  

So far as I'm concerned, if the college education could provide students with the chances of internship or other kinds of working experiences, there are at least three aspects will be enhanced. First, the students will surely become competitive since they know how to do as well as how to take tests; Second, the companies will feel more satisfied about the newly enrolled for their ability to finish a task all by themselves; Third, the universities will also win a better reputation from the society because the feedback of their graduates from the companied will also be improved. With all the reasons above, I strongly agree that the university education should add the internship part.

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