Thanks for heqiongsophie MM's earnest check-up.

You are right. We should no only improve ourselves but also rise others up.

Next time, I will be dedicated to the check-up for others

呵呵,我会尽力的,今年暑假要做宅男了........准备GRE+iBT

Friends are of great significance to our life. We all love our friends and hope the friendship would last for ever. But the problem is, sometime when friends do wrong, how we should behave? Some people hold the opinion that it is better to let a friend make a mistake than saying or doing something that may destroy the friendship. However, I do not agree with this opinion.
    Our friendship needs our care and protect, it is very critical for us to maintain a friendship. Sometime we have to be very tolerant and forgive friend's mistakes. By doing so we may keep our friend staying around us and we can enjoy a relatively harmonious friendship. If we point out friend's fault every time we would do great harm to their dignity and make them very embarrassed or upside, and that would probably ruin a very precious friendship.
    However, as I view the point. Numerous though the advantages of ignoring our friends' fault and let them make mistakes, they still cannot maintain a real friendship. First of all, a friend should be very frank. He would help his friend to avoid mistakes by saying or doing something to correct his friend's behavior, this sometime may destroy the friendship, but real friends should be tolerant and forgiving, not only to forgive friend's mistakes but also to stand friend's pointing out his own weakness, Because after all, it is for the interest of their friend that they say or do something to correct their friends. For instance, once upon a time when I was in the elementary school, I often forget to finish my homework and for one time I asked my best friend Tony that if he could lend me his for copying. Tony refused my request and said that would do no good for me. Though at first I was a little angry with him, but I understood he was not unwilling to help but unwilling to see me to make mistakes.
    Second, sometime if we let our friend do whatever they want no matter it is right or wrong. We are actually doing harms to them. For example, if I have a friend who want to steal something from a classmates, and if I know but do not prevent him. He might grow a habit of stealing and become a thief in the future, so too much tolerance sometime is poisonous to friendship.
    Maintain our friendship is very critical for us, and sometime we really should not let a friend make a mistake in order to avoid conflict. Instead, we can avoid it by being more polite and gentler when pointing out their mistakes.

第二段
有点not adress the topic well
所以前面最好加个surely,
语法问题
Our friendship needs our care and protect
protect应该为protection

embarrassed or upside,  upside应该为upset

He would help his friend to avoid mistakes by saying or doing something to correct his friend's behavior, this sometime may destroy the friendship, but real friends should be tolerant and forgiving, not only to forgive friend's mistakes but also to stand friend's pointing out his own weakness, 这句话太长了,在this sometime may...另起一句吧
stand friend's...什么意思?应该是stand with

接着
最后一段
还是要强调逻辑关系，突出重点，
所以要加上适当连接词，就可以让读者清楚名了
所以加上although....或者but...

全文注意使用过渡词，连词等，有少量语法错误，
不过全文还是比较流畅的，论据也较充分，用词准确。
利用最好一些时间再梳理一下，祝6.29日考试成功！

感谢批改!

What is true friendship? When a friend makes a mistake, should I tell him/her or let it go? That is a question that has been confusing many people. As for me, I consider it is haste to make a conclusion without careful thinking. It should depend on circumstances such as what is mistake and the impact of the mistake that can bring about.  

If it is only a little fault that will not lead to the unconvertible consequence, but in turn could remind the significance of something that the friend should understand, as a sincere friend, one should let the problem go. Maybe it will lead to the temperate misunderstanding between friends; however, in the long run, further benefits to the friend will eliminate the immediate disadvantage. For instance, at one time I forgot to return books to the liberty and my friend Mike knew all about these, but he did not tell me, because he would like me to realize the essence of being on time. At first I complained, but thinking in a while, I understand what his real meaning and appreciate his thought.

However, when it comes to a critical or emergent event, it is undoubtedly necessary to give a effective and warmhearted advice to friends. Let us take another friend Jane of mine as an example. Jane was always a excellent student before she was addicted to net game. Nevertheless, when emerging in web game, she began lose herself and her grade fell behind directly and quickly. As one of her best friends, I reckon that it is imperative to pull her back to the routine life and study, and therefore I talked with her for a whole night, explaining the adversity of net game. By these means, she was moved by my sincere spirit and promised that keep away from net game.  

In sum, from the evidences provided above, we clearly learn that it should depend on circumstances to decide whether respect friends' willing even they make some mistake or point those mistakes out as soon as we detect them. With regard to those minor problems that will not lead to the fatal result but could remind friends, we should keep them existing. As to those mistakes that may have devastating consequences, we should take effective measure to prevent them happening from the cradle.

It should depend on circumstances such as what is mistake and the impact of the mistake that can bring about.  
应改为
it should......and what  is the impact of the mistake that can bring about
这样句子平衡/
还有That is a question that has been confusing many people. 应改为confused

第三段
give a effective and warmhearted advice to friends. 应该为give an effective..
同样a excellent student  应改为 an excellent student
这句话her grade fell behind directly and quickly 最好改为fells/drops (down)

怎么一直没人改我的作文呢,早就改过别人的了

水平有限，欢迎来拍

There are many different kinds of definitions of the word of friend. Some people think that friends are just some people who can have a good time together. But in the dictionary of mine, a friend means someone who helps me when I am in trouble, teaches me when I am wrong. So I disagree with the view of the topic. In my opinion, trying to prevent a friend making mistakes is not destroying but may consolidate friendship.

First, no one never make a mistake. Maybe only the God can resolve this problem. When people around us make mistakes, common people should try to stop them. Friends are people who are very close in relationship. Seeing a friend making a mistake without saying or doing anything is even cool. Sometimes ourselves may do something wrong unconsciously, and will feel so sorry aftermath, wishing there were someone who can tell us before all things have done. A true friend is just the person who can stop you before you fall in to the infinitely deep hole.

Second, if a friendship can be destroyed because of a friend help the other, this kind of friendship is not the true one. Nowadays, many people get together and the goals of their friendship are making money easily, or enjoy themselves after tiring work. These kinds of friendship do not base on true love, so they are not consolid of course. I have a friend in our class. We do not talk much but we understand each other very much. Because of disappointment of study, he indulged into online games once, and even forgot of all things in his life. I do not want him to be like that, and worry about his health, so I tried many times to rebuild his confidence of life. Finally, he gave up the games and restarts his life and study. Our relationship also becomes much closer now.

In conclusion, on one can avoid making a mistake, including friends. When he/she makes a mistake, it is the friends’ responsibility to tell him/her and try to do something helpful. The true friendship can surely endure this kind of thing and will become more beautiful.


[ 本帖最后由 bill911u2 于 2008-7-19 17:07 编辑 ]