TOPIC: Choose friends who are different from you or similar to you.

There is much controversy over the topic whether it is appropriate for us to have friends who have similar interests as we do. From my own perspective, my preference would strongly incline to the adverse side of having a friend who is merely similar to you after a deliberative calculation especially as this is more funny, easier for communication and developing personality. Please allow me to explain.

I cannot negate that some people do prefer having friends who shares similar hobbies with them. For one thing, this would be expedient for them to get along with each other. For another, they could do what they are into with each other.

Although such opinion holds one or two advantages, yet, to my point of view, the merits of a friend who is not common with you still far outweigh those of the opposition. Three premier causes are presented below.

In the first place, this is more funny. For example, you are an extrovert. You have a new friend that may take you to do something that you have never tried, like doing yoga, which you may consider it dull. But with the help of him, you may think, “Wow, this is quite nice, too! Not as boring as I thought. I can relieve from my schoolwork by doing this. I like it!”

Moreover, you would communicate with others better. For instance, when the friendship of your friend’s and yours is deeper, don’t you think the communication with a person who isn’t in common with you would be more efficient? Then, when you work and are negotiating with a person that is hard to deal with on an agreement, you might find it easy to get along with him.

Last but not least, you would have a more accomodating personality. Let’s assume you have known this “different” friend for ten years. You might despise him at the first time or might think, “Oh, he’s so odd. How can we be friends?!” When you got to know him deeper, you would be more likely to think like him, bear, or even follow what he liked to do. Soon, your personality would tend to feel “Let’s alright.” by the time you meet a person with different behaviors or culture. As a result, others may recognize you are a friendly person to deal with, you would make more friends and become more popular.

To put all in a nutshell, all the factors I reasoned above determine me to strongly commit to a notion that a friend that differs from you is more preferable, as not only would he let you have more fun, but an improvement in communication skills and personality would also benefit you.

写了将近一个钟头…… TAT. 写到最后由江郎才尽的感觉。。。
p.s.:发觉把模板打到电脑上面还要很长时间……
谢啦~~各位大小马~

[ 本帖最后由 maxx 于 2008-7-4 10:15 编辑 ]

Thereis much controversy over the topic whether it is appropriate for us tohave friends who have similar interests as we do. From my ownperspective, my preference would strongly incline to the adverse sideof having a friend who is merely similar to you(me) after a deliberativecalculation especially as this is more funny, easier for communicationand developing personality.(整个句子太长,而且表达的意思不容易理解) Please allow me to explain.(这句话出现在书面语中?)

I cannot negate that some people doprefer having friends who shares similar hobbies with them. For onething, this would be expedient for them to get along with each other.For another, they could do what they are into(口语,书面不要用) with each other.

Although such opinion holds one or twoadvantages, yet, to my point of view, the merits of a friend who is notcommon with you still far outweigh those of the opposition. Threepremier causes are presented below.

In the first place, this is more funny.For example, (用you来举例,个人认为最好不要用,用one,或者people)you are an extrovert. You have a new friend that may(去掉) takeyou to do something(带某人做某事...要换个说法,建议,邀请) that you have never tried, like doing yoga, whichyou may consider it dull. But with the help of him(his help), you may think,“Wow, this is quite nice, too! Not as boring as I thought. I canrelieve from my schoolwork by doing this. I like it!”(过于口语化了)

Moreover, you would(can) communicate withothers better. For instance, when the friendship of your friend’s andyours(between you and your friend) is deeper, don’t you think the communication with a person whoisn’t in common with you would be more efficient? Then,(作文不要用then) when you workand are negotiating with a person that(who) is hard to deal with on(reach) anagreement (with), you might(will) find it easy to get along with him(指代模糊).

Last but not least, you would have a moreaccomodating personality. Let’s(Let us) assume you have known this “different”friend for ten years. You might despise him at the first time or mightthink, “Oh, he’s so odd. How can we be friends?!” When you got to knowhim deeper, you would be more likely to think like him, bear, or evenfollow what he liked(like) to do. Soon, your personality would tend to feel“Let’s alright.” by the time you meet a person with different behaviorsor culture. As a result, others may recognize you are a friendly personto deal with, you would make more friends and become more popular.

To put all in a nutshell, all the factorsI reasoned above determine me to strongly commit to a notion that afriend that differs from you is more preferable, as not only would helet you have more fun, but an improvement in communication skills andpersonality would also benefit you.

我觉得有几个问题,
1.口语化严重,作文中间不该出现,楼主多用书面语表达
2.may,might,would,should这些词的使用不正确,请楼主参考
http://zhidao.baidu.com/question/50301516.html?fr=qrl
3. 论证不到位,光有模板只是骨架出来了,但是里头的内容却不是很有说服力.
4.书面作文,不要缩写, don't,can't,isn't,aren't 这些都不允许, 要写成do not,cannot, is not....

谢谢ls~
请大家狠狠拍我~
不要留情！

我以为既然是在双引号说出来的句子就是要用口语的……
不好意思~

引号里头的确就是你想的,也的确可以用口语,但是你的目的其实要减少用引号.到最后干脆就不用引号,因为你想的那些东西都可以客观描述出来.

举个例子 ,“Wow, this is quite nice, too! Not as boring as I thought. I canrelieve from my schoolwork by doing this. I like it!”

你改成 You probably consider the Yoga as an fantastic sport which is of great help to relieve you from your schoolwork! As a result you may fall in love with it!

这样一个句子,还是在说你的想法, 但是却是客观描述.

oic...
Thanks a million~