009 Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

To enjoy the advantage which is brought by industrial revolution, some people like to live in the big city, while someone tends to live a peaceful life in small town. I think we'd better live in certain place for a long time, but change to reside frequently.

It is true that we can acquire more convenience from big city, from shopping to recreation. We can easily take a taxi and go to hospital when somebody around us get sick suddenly. Moreover, we can also be operated by the best doctors with the best machine. What is more, running a business in big city is easier, many opportunities are provided. If we are lack of money, a investment can be acquired more quickly and easily, since there are many investors who is ready to service for yor. So, there seems a significant advantage living in city.

Also, Living in rural region can also give us something that is unique. First, the expenditure is very low. We do not have to worry about the cost of raising a child, their education tuition and so forth. Furthermore, living in the small town also means a slower pace of life. There is no need to get up early and sleep late. What should we do is to completely enjoy our life, the details of happiness.

With consideration of the two kinds of areas, I think we should make use of their merits and change residents frequently. We can earn money and run our business in the big city, consume it and seek for relaxation in countryside. Thus, not only a better life we will lead, but also a better sense of life we will enjoy. And I think that is the best choice.

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互改To enjoy the advantage which is brought by industrial revolution, some people like to live in the big city, while someone tends to live
a peaceful life in small town. I think we'd better live in certain place for a long time, but change to reside frequently.

It is true that we can acquire more convenience from big city, from shopping to recreation. We can easily take a taxi and go to hospital when somebody around us get sick suddenly. 感觉这个句子好像有点问题，前边的take a taxi和后边的somebody get sick 不是怎么搭调，也许去掉会更好吧？Moreover, we can also be operated by the best doctors with the best machine. What is more, running a business in big city is easier, many opportunities are provided. If we are lack of money, a an?? investment can be acquired more quickly and easily, since there are many investors who is are ready to service for you. So, there seems have many significant advantages living in city.

Also, Living in rural region can also give us something that is unique. First, the expenditure is very low. We do not have to worry about the cost of raising a child, their education tuition and so forth. Furthermore, living in the small town also means a slower pace of life. There is no need to get up early and sleep late. What we should do is to completely enjoy our life, the details of happiness.

With consideration of the two kinds of areas, I think we should make use of their merits and change residents frequently. We can earn money and run our business in the big city, consume it and seek for relaxation in countryside. Thus, not only a better life we will lead, but also a better sense of life we will enjoy. And I think that is the best choice.
LZ的文章有一些拼写上和语法上的小毛病，建议多注意下，
另外，感觉LZ在论述乡村生活时候，不是很充分，可以再丰富一下这一段的论述，
字数还能更多些~
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