018 What are some important qualities of a good supervisor (boss)? Use specific details and examples to explain why these qualities are important.

In my point of view, a good leadership should include a sense of responsibility, patience, and having the courage to be innovative.

First, a sense of responsibility makes the team go high. Since the leader take on the duty, his teammates can do thing freely and more tend to make their best to achieve high goal. Moreover, responsibility also stimulates the leaders to focus on high aim. Backtracking the great figure in the history, such as Washington, Roosevelt, who owned this kind of characteristic, we can conclude that the higher aim he has, the easier he can success.

Second, patience makes the team go long. When facing with a variety of problem, the leader should calm down and be patient about them so that he can make a correct decision. Also, sometimes the employee may make mistake. If the leader can keep his temper and comfort the mistake-maker, I think he must do his job more hard in the future and treat the leader with heart and soul.

Third, the courage of innovation makes the team overpass the obstacles in their way. As a team, it is not unchangeable. Inevitably encountering several kinds of problems requires the leader's competence to cope with them innovatively. Furthermore, changing means a challenge to the past. So, the leader should own the characteristic of changing the team to adjust it to the changing world bravely.

To summarize, if the leader owns the three characteristic above, the team will go higher, longer, and steadier and I believe such a leader would be respected by all of his employees.

我想先说一下 我的作文水平很烂 所以很可能会说错了  楼主别介意啊 我不会语法 所以只能帮楼主看看句子的意思
sense of responsibility makes the team go high  责任感使团队进步？似乎不是吧 我感觉是责任感使大家工作更加努力 努力的结果是进步

Since the leader take on the duty, his teammates can do thing freely and more tend to make their best to achieve high goal  我感觉这句前后不是因果关系
Backtracking the great figure in the history, such as Washington, Roosevelt, who owned this kind of characteristic, we can conclude that the higher aim he has, the easier he can success. 我感觉是病句吧
mistake-maker 我知道你想表达的意思 但不能这么写吧

263个字 有点少了 最好要330或350以上的 每段的first second 这种词看着有点死 最好换换 第一段的in my opinion不太好 因为议论文要客观 最好换成是 admittedly significantly surpisingly等这种的 就算是个人观点 最好写成是 as far as i am concerned

以上仅是个人观点 如果错了 楼主别怪啊 哈哈

In my point of view, a good leadership should include a sense of responsibility, patience, and having the courage to be innovative.（开头一句话太简单了，最好是先引入话题，再阐明观点）

First, the sense of responsibility makes the team more competent (go high 是中文的说法吧). The leader who does his duty（查字典查到的“尽职”） would make his teammates perform freely and tend to make more efforts to achieve a high goal. Moreover, responsibility also stimulates the leaders to pursue higher (focus on aim逻辑上有点那啥). Backtracking to （没用过这个词，不过好像是不及物的）the great figures in the history, such as Washington and Roosevelt, they（我自己的语感而已，可以无视) both owned this kind of characteristic. （可以加点，比如“所以她们都取得了什么什么样的成功”之类的）Therefore we can conclude that the higher he aims, the more he achieves.

Second, patience makes the team go long (go long也是中文的说法吧). When facing with a variety of problem, the leader should calm down and be patient with (固定用法) them so that he can make a correct decision. Also, sometimes the employee might make mistake. If the leader can keep his temper and comfort the mistake-maker, the team would XXX. He’d better（must, should这类教唆词汇应尽量避免）treat the members with heart and soul in order to make the team better.

Third, the courage of innovation makes the team overpass the obstacles in their way. As a team, it is unchangeable.(it是什么？not去掉吧) Inevitably encountering several kinds of problems requires the leader's competence to cope with them innovatively. Furthermore, changing means a challenge to the past. So, the leader should own the characteristic of changing the team to adjust it to the changing world bravely. (太绕了我没看懂)

To summarize, if the leader owns the three characteristic above, the team will become stronger, longer(不知改啥好), and steadier and I believe such a leader would be respected by all of his employees.

HOHO 你欠我一篇了 写好再给你改

[ 本帖最后由 colornibaby 于 2008-7-28 15:59 编辑 ]

duty有责任的意思的 那个应该有NOT 我感觉他想表达的 IT不是一成不变的

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原帖由 keejje 于 2008-7-28 15:59 发表
duty有责任的意思的 那个应该有NOT 我感觉他想表达的 IT不是一成不变的

恩 但是take on the duty不觉得有点不搭吗
我没看懂那个it。。。

我感觉那个词组还好吧 就是讲承担责任  IT的确指代不明 呵呵

太感谢大家感谢了
感动的都哭了