挖坑,挖坑!!!!我要种了自己,然后发芽!!!

以前写的都是一些较短的文章,现在独立写作要求的是以前的一倍了,应该是要加强练习的....

本人11月9号就要考试了，现在还在迷茫了,我真的要弄好啊!!!!

每天都来记,我想,这是我必须做到的,或许有一天,我会真正觉得这对我来说并不是什么事情,我想那时的我就做到了....

加油吧!!!别让小小的TOEFL难住你,小马儿也是会快些跑的....


                                BY:GGDLOVE   8.16

有决心， 加油！
注意方法和效率， 写作建议你先积累， 然后再自己的积累之上再创作， 这样可以避免在自己创作的时候把自己的错误和缺点一再的强化。写作切忌闭门造车。
http://bbs.xiaoma.com/thread-18257-1-4.html 欢迎加入小马写作课堂小组认识跟多的小马和大家一起进步， 写作小组的组织方式这两天会尽快完善

楼主也可以在这里写一下备考写作的日志 记录自己备考新的， 给其他小马做个榜样

花的时间有点长了,发现还是没有去熟悉那些已经有的模板.........欢迎牛人拍砖,指导!!

Independent Writingo you agree or disagree the following statement?Advertisement is a waste of money,because customers already know what they want.

I am not agree with this statement.

Yes,if an producer advertise on a TV or Newspaper or use some billboard,it will cost a lot of money.But,usually adertisements is needed and useful.For example,before a new product is pulled to the market.What should the producer do the first is advertise for their product through all kinds of media as they can,because they should let the consumers know their goods.Especially for some articles for daily use.As we know,a person usually use few kinds of fimilar goods in the daily life,and you can usually notice this satuation that a custom in a supermarket walk straightly to some counter and then catch something directly.If an producer doesn't set some advrtisements to attract the custom's attention and let them to know about the new product through advertisement,a lot of consumers cann't notice about that there are a new kind of good,say nothing of buy it.

Advertisement can show the advantages of your goods to consumers,let the consumers know what functions your product can provide.Usually,a product must have many competitors,and consumers have many choices.And every product has it's own advantages,if a custon know the details of a product,he or she should choose it when they need.As a milk producer,they has produce a kind of milk which is rich of Zinc.The producer can advertise for it to show the features to customs,the Zinc is an very improtant element of human's body,a child should have more mature brain if he or she ingest suitable Zinc.Everyone should buy some milk,but through the advertisement,they know the special benefits of your product,they must pay more favour on it.

So,I think advertisement isn't a waste of money.Even if a custom already know what they want,advertisement bring your product to their mind or at least let them to know the name of your goods.


以前都没有练习写作,深感痛惜,要是以前都能够去多看看模板..也不至于写的时候,抓头挠鳃了..但是算是开始吧...给自己加油.!!!

过来支持楼主~~~加油哦~~~楼主时间还有一段~~~建议楼主多积累资料~~~多看看优秀的作文·~~应该会对楼主有帮助~~
加油~~~

想说一下你的开头！ 首段就只有这一句,开门见山.实际上这样写作的考生并不理解,题目种的问题只是一个借口,回答问题并不需要这样紧迫.这种“抢答式”开头的弊端在于过于简洁,放弃了对题目的必要重述和表现自己写作水平的机会. 你一定要把握这个机会！
http://bbs.xiaoma.com/thread-19449-1-1.html   这个是落落版主的帖子 记录自己学习优秀文章的过程！ 你可以学习一下 给你的备考提供个思路 有什么不懂的可以给落落留言

先发了吧,仓促的一篇作文...希望牛人们多多拍砖...最大的问题还是谋篇的问题,今天开了一些别人的经验,还是没有准备一个适合自己的模板..写的时候很仓促,有时候不知道怎么写了...明天的吧!!!


Independent Writing: Do you agree or disagree if people want to have a good future they should have a careful plan while they are still young?


Everyone wish to have a good future,but many great man was always a loser prior to success.If you stand on the piont that a person must arrange to plan carefully when they are still young as they want to get a good future,I can hardly agree with you.

First of all,anyone cann't prodict what will happenned in the future,a plan which he or she made at a young age may not suitable for the following period.For example,a boy prior to become a man,he wish to become a docter,because a docter can get high income and great fame.And then,he has made a careful plan,he worked hard in his primary school and middle school,then get the admission to a medical college.But when he know more about this feild,he may lost his interest in become a docter.When he look forwards to search why he chose to become a docter,he found that's just because he just know a docter has a good income and fame.

There is an important phnomenon I want to mention is that,some careers which is hot today might be cool down in the future,and there many kinds of new potential careers appeared everyday.You have made a plan,and you want walk along this plan to get a good future,you have set all the detials.The human are developing day be day,your plan need to be amend at any time,the concept of a good future are always been renovating.Many of the successful people did know what will lead them to get a better future,and the opportunity they has catched might be unknown when they encount it.

The idea in the younger ages is not mature,and there are so much unexpectable situation in the whole period of life.And you will never no,what you will encouner in the future.


8.18
谢谢小艾的提醒,我重新写了下昨天文章的开头.这样看起来应该会更好一点.....

我看了落落的复习笔记,真的很不错,有很多优秀的作文让我看了觉得有很多启发.我会好好研习的,希望有一天,我也能写得那么好!!

今天我会好好写的.

[ 本帖最后由 ggdlove 于 2008-8-18 11:33 编辑 ]

Nowadays, advertising has evolved tnto a multi-billion industry and permeated nearly every facet of modern society.  What is the majic of advertisment? When you see KOBE with his Nike shoes, KOBE 3,  flying, moving, and dunking in a advertisment on TV, will you say, God I hope I can have that shoes, maybe I can fly either. You see adveritisment is working. Thus, I definely disagree the statment.

你的开头不知道为什么总是那么短如果觉得时间不够用 一开始练习的时候不要考虑时间 看重质量 看重我今天提高了多少！
我尝试着给你写了个开头， 不敢说完美， 但是我觉得比你的要好， 而且你的i am agree with。。。还有语法错误 直接i disagree with the statement. 然后尝试和把开头写的精致， 写的与众不同， 与那些呆板空洞的“模板”区别开来！ 不要放弃这个机会

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原帖由 ggdlove 于 2008-8-18 00:05 发表
先发了吧,仓促的一篇作文...希望牛人们多多拍砖...最大的问题还是谋篇的问题,今天开了一些别人的经验,还是没有准备一个适合自己的模板..写的时候很仓促,有时候不知道怎么写了...明天的吧!!!


Independent Writin ...

嘿嘿~~~过去看了也不说留个言·~~~~
自己的模板，嗯，就是自己的写作习惯吧，这个是要积累的，多看，多学，才能多用~~~~希望我的笔记对你有帮助，也希望你能提提自己的看法~~~大家共同进步·~~~加油~~~~

确实是看了,但是还没有看完,就没有来得及说点什么了.....落落给我们分享的作文经验,真的是很值得一看的....我今天索性慢慢来写我的练习,看起来和昨天有了很大的改进,但是为了用词的丰富,我动用的词典,我会把这些有用的词汇记下来的.....

在落落斑竹开的帖子里面,我也学到了很多我以前没有看到的写作方法,真的是十分感谢...还是先把今天的文章发了吧..一会去和同学吃饭,不知道什么时候能回来呢..

"When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success." Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.


Success is a sintheses of many factors,hard work is a main element,but luck is also necessary.I cann't agree with all of these viewpoints to some degree,for we have to become conscious of all the respects.

Success is 1% luck and 99% perspiration.Look at a success,what you need to find out is not just the great achievement,must notice the perspirations backward.But the effect is not come from hard work only,the luck is always existing in the process.A researcher have a important discovery in a experiment,before that moment,he has done the same experiment for thousands times,but a minor mistake lead him to get a opposite result,and then be recognized.The mistake lead the seccess and luck cann't be ignored to this achievement.

There are many other characteristics that an achiever need to possess,such as the humous,honesty,wise,perseverance,furthermore do something others cann't.In another word,a effectual method is needed,blindly hard work can just attain a result of great worker.The spectial characteristics of an achiever can encreace the efficiency of process,which can lead a better result of the work.For a businessman,to choose an potential investment from all the projects,far-sight is a the leading element.A successful man must have a original concept,which lead him to get the informations that out of common,not just hard work.

Hard work is the foundation of sucess,but other elements is also needed,for example luck,these advantages can lead a more effectual work.Don't forget hard work is the main factor of success,either don't leave yourself into pute work,that will waste a lot of time.


还是有很多缺点的,希望能指点迷津!