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[写作求拍] 第二次求拍~明天就考啦~希望也是最后一次~大家帮帮忙吧?~谢啦~

第二次求拍~明天就考啦~希望也是最后一次~大家帮帮忙吧?~谢啦~

恩恩……我考完托福要是过了就回报小马来批作文o>_<o 一定的!
话说谢谢大家啦~这次注意了开头和细节的问题……可是真的怕例子太多字数太多了……而且我词汇语法不好……所以本人作文一向走简单或者啰嗦风- -
Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

“Everybody loves adventure!” are words written on the advertisement for an adventure park. For most people, the words are right. Nowadays, more and more people become engaged in dangerous sports. The reason for this may be the thrill, the happiness and the feeling of achieve, which can be found in dangerous activities.

To start with, daredevils can find excitement by joining adventures. Lu Yuan, one of the most famous philosopher and educator in ancient China once commented “What we are looking for in whole life is thrill”. In fact, according to researchers, 84% of people who attend bungee-jumping said they just feel like to be excited. These thrills and funs can color the dull life of many worker and students. In that way, they will have more passion and energy to do their jobs after the activity.

Meanwhile, some professors do think thrill can relieve the depression and stress. Therefore, participating in exciting activities can make people less depressed and feel happier. As a matter of fact, we can always see the smiles from people after they finish their games in adventure theme park. And also, the happier and less stressful a man is, the healthier he will be. So in some ways, the dangerous games make people keep healthy.

There is another factor contribute to the love for dangerous sports-the feeling of achievement. After the daredevils experience the games, they are being considered to be tough and strong. They also feel this, to conquer a dangerous activity, is a kind of success and a sign of braveness. Lily is a girl who loves dangerous sports extremely. Every time after climbing a rock mountain, Lily felt she step up and she always thinks one day, she can conquer the nature in this way. She is satisfied by the success of the dangerous sports.

In conclusion, the aim for many people to attend dangerous activities is to look for excite, success and feel relax. When laying dangerous games, they forget the danger and enjoy themselves.
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例子多字数多 是文章的优点 你在怕什么呢? 怕考试的时候写不完? 还是....
文章的总体结构很好。很完整 从开头, 分论点, 分析, 例子写的还是比较流畅的, 除了个别小毛病整体还是不错的, 比如daredevil常看作是贬义词用在这里不是很合适
some professors do think thrill can relieve 改为 some professors think thrill do relieve ...好些  虽然有点小错误但是不影响整体!

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这里给你3个sub points 帮你扩展一下思维
sub point 1
Average people are attracted to dangerous sports, for instance, bungee jumping or rock climbing, to have fun, reduce social or work pressure, gain thrilling experieces and escape from the boring daily life

sub point 2
Most criminals participate in dangerous activities for money, for instance, drug trafficking, bank rabbery.

sub point 3
Many scientists choose to engage in dangerous activities, such as scientific experiment, to seek answers to scientific problems

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谢谢谢谢!!~~超级感谢……
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