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的学校现在有一笔钱,你觉得是花在给学生卖电脑上好还是给图书馆买书好?



Recently our school received a sum of donation, and the school has not decided yet to purchase either computers or books for library. Some people argued that it is necessary to use these money on buying computers for students, for nowadays computers are necessities for every college student. Nearly all students now need computers in their majors. Other people said that they would rather spend this money on buying books for the library, because the amount of books in the library is the symbol of the competence of the university. From my point of view, I strongly agree with the latter.

First, everyone cannot deny that the competence of the university is, to a large extent, measured by the numbers of books that its library owns. Books are not out of date in this e-time; on the contrary, they are still playing an important role in the university. According to the poll made by the school union, 90% of the professors are still in favor of resorting to books rather than on computers, when they are searching for some references. They say that they can find references directly and quickly by looking up books, but when it comes to computers, as there are too many rubbish information, they can hardly find useful information.

Second, in our daily studying, I think, most of the students would still choose going to the library, grabbing a book and begin their exploring in the sea of knowledge. We all had the experience that reading a book is much more efficient than reading on the computer. When reading on the computer, we may be distracted by the other functions, for example, the games. As we know, many students have computers their own, but few of them really use them for studying.

Although there are some benefits to buy computers for students, for example, to give the students more conveniences, these benefits can be neglected when considering the benefits of buying books for libraries. We come to universities in the aim of studying, not for the comfort of lives.

In a word, I support that the university should spend the money on buying books for libraries.
The university is the place for us to grasp knowledge and improve our abilities of self-learning. In addition, if we use these money buying computers, we should spend another sum of money to maintain these gadgets, and after several years, it will be eliminated (remember the Moor’s Law?). that’s why I believe we should spend money on buying books

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181. In your country, is there more need for land to be left in its natural condition or is there more need for land to be developed for housing and industry? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

According to its vast territory and high-density population, China, my homeland needs more land to be developed for housing and industry than that to be left in natural condition. This essay will discuss this viewpoint specifically and reasonably.

First and foremost, Chinese population makes housing necessary and vital which requires a considerable size of land. China has the most population in the world, as everyone knows, approximately 1.3 billion people, accounting for twenty-one percent of the world population. To house such an immeasurable number of population, Chinese government makes great efforts to develop real estate. Apartment houses are erected, investments are largely made, and even every inch of the land seems likely to be stuffed a house. However, the demands cannot yet be satisfied. In the late of the last century, the majority of the population centered in Beijing and other metropolises located on the southeast coastline, but nowadays, conversely, this coverage has expanded towards the hinterland of China, such as the northeast and the southwest. Take my home town Changchun as an example, before this century, it was just a medium-sized city in the northeast area, but today, it is more than twice and contains many new communities and large shopping centers established in the outermost suburbs.

Next, the industrial development needs land sources. As a developing country, of which the economy comparatively lags behind that of the high developed countries, China needs to build more large-scaled factories to accelerate the industrial development. Architectonically speaking, the practical functions of a factory determine its size. One is that the mechanized industrial production demands large interiors in which manufacturing could be carried on. Another is that the administration of giant industrial and commercial concerns required office buildings of unprecedented size, containing suites of offices easily accessible to employees and customers. Besides, from the social point of view, people need jobs. A new factory, unquestionably, will draw a huge quantity of populations to find jobs, which promise to provide a good housing condition as prerequisite. Communities of employees will further enlarge the factory. After certain amounts of shops, schools and banks are built, the factory will eventually become a district of a city. This is the very process in wich my hometown Automotive Industries Development Area, the most important district in Changchun has formed.

Consequently, taking into account of all these factors, we may reach the conclusion that it would be better for China to develop its land for housing and industry based on social and economic reasons. If both of the two problems were well solved, as far as I am concerned, land would find its value.






[ 本帖最后由 AnnaZhang8524 于 2008-10-5 21:05 编辑 ]

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Recently our school received a sum of donation, and the school has not decided yet 今天刚看到关于副词的知识,一般要放在所修饰的词前。to purchase either computers or books for library. Some people argued that it is necessary to use /spend these money on buying 去掉computers for students, for nowadays computers are necessities for every college student. Nearly all students now need computers in their majors. 我觉得这三个方连续的students有点重复Other people said that they would rather spend this money on buying books for the library, because the amount of books in the library is the symbol of the competence of the university. From my point of view, I strongly agree with the latter.

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没有人改么?

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Chinese population makes housing necessary and vital which requires a considerable size of land   
which requires a considerable size of land    是定语从句吗? 先行词呢

even every inch of the land seems likely to be stuffed a house.   a house前加with?

开头结尾还可以多写一些,比如写写背景之类的,参考戴云的讲义

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