Food has become easier to prpare. His(Is) this change improved the way people live?

As the old saying of china ,"Bread is the staff of life". Begining with the period of ape man, food, berond all doubt, is most important in people's lives. From hunting beast for eating(可略) fresh meat, to planting corn relying on different seasons, and then to toady's getting sundry of food in different seasons, the way people preparing for food has great advancement. With its development, it（which）do improve our lives.

For starters, people today can prepare their meal much easier than has ever been（可略） before. To prepare a single dinner , provident housewives usually had to work for hours in the past: they had to buy home dirty vegetables which had to wash, meat which had to slice , and so on so forth. Each and every step of preparation was a time-consuming task. But now, things are entirelt(entirely) different. Supermarkets provide vegetables, mean clean and neat, some of them even have relevant ingredient and（Besides,） with the invention of microwave oven, it only need a few minutes to be made into delicious meals.Nowsdays much portable, prepackaged food can be seen everywhere, which is very well-suited for busy people.

Furthermore, today's people can easily get various kinds of(略去) food in any season. we all vividly remembered the people in Tang dynasty, which we studied in our middle school, who are tired to death for getting litchi form far distance for their empress. And now these things by no means happen again. Thanks to the refrigerator, and other mathine can fresh food, we can get sundry food in different seasons and from various regions, which make today's people live a ancient emperor's life in every day.

In addition, nowadays it is much more healthy eating food than before . Much healthy food, which contains low fat, calories and cholesterol and much nutrition , is on sale everywhere. It （Nowadays, food, with low fat, calories and cholesterol but rich in nutrition, is availible every. Which ）make people achieve well-liking lives.Of course, such a change has also brought some unexpected consequences. For example, the radiation of microwave oven is not good for people's body. But if you can use it in correct ways, its positive facets would get the run upon its negative ones.

To put it in a nutshell, the change of food becoming much easier to prepare (the change, greatly easy the preparation of food, ) do improve the people's life. It not only save us much time on cooking(略), but also make us （enable us to）taste different food in any season all around the world. And we can not forget that today's food make us more healthy.






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[ 本帖最后由 mh007 于 2007-12-21 14:24 编辑 ]

谢谢各位,大家一起加油!

这遍修改稿看过,质量相当高啦,居然把ape都搬出来当论据,佩服!

请你自己改写句子,就是想提醒你当一句不大有把握的话,想想改写保证句子多样化!

原来那篇也有ape man 那，呵呵，谢谢各位，大家一起加油！